hello, it is much better now. just a little bit more to add and then i guess it would be great.
For the background section, i guess it better to define what transgender/bisexual – sexual orientation and all other terms properly? and clearly define the scientific words? maybe CBT? and how does FMRI work or PET work so that they could actually be used to scan non-binary people?and which part of the brain actually show the difference, and maybe a scientific name?
for the method/procedure section for the proposed activity, i guess its good to describe the design of the study, such as, defining independent and dependent variables and state any potential confounding variables and how you will control them. Give details of the treatment of data and statistical analyses that you feel will be appropriate. also, a full description of the participants who will take part in your study, including details such as sample size, age distribution, sex if relevant, special characteristics and any inclusion/exclusion criteria. If the participants are to be selected or assigned to conditions at random, how will this be accomplished? for example, how many binary/non binary people are selected and whats their first step when going through the procedure? how long does this take? for the CBT, what kind of behavioural experiment they are going to go through?
Describe the procedure you will use to collect the data, any apparatus used and its specific function, and the rationale behind your choices. Details of how you have developed (or will develop) the procedure, and of the reliability and validity of tests and measures should be provided.
to the writer: maybe could add some more reference for it?